Michael of St. Joseph 🔏 on Nostr: Those POV swaps are egregious. You clearly line break for a random guard's POV for ...

Those POV swaps are egregious. You clearly line break for a random guard's POV for some useless commentary that could have been nested anywhere else (or omitted entirely). Then you swap back to the woman's POV for a few sentences before swapping AGAIN (without a line break) to a totally different POV. That's crazy.